Thread: Can you help with my book?

I'm trying to write A white knight in a medieval fantasy where chivalry has died. Where the only person left who can respect this forgotten softness and kindness is a monster who never had any before.
Do you have any lived-experiences of horrible women you're willing to share?
I want to write the worst princess imaginable. Someone that you feel wrath against the first page you read with her in it. What's stuff that you hate about women?
What's stuff that women do that melts your heart and gives you the tingles?
Would you lot be interested in this type of love story for men?

Originally Posted by cowboi69

What's stuff that women do that melts your heart and gives you the tingles?
Would you lot be interested in this type of love story for men?

A strange choice of words for a man to use, I never heard of a guy getting the tingles.

Putting that aside, do I have any interest in your book? Afraid I don't, and doubt anyone else has either. As far as stories about rotten women go, there everywhere. You don't need us for that, and even if you did you could find several hundred tales in Lounge without our help.

Cow boi?

If you ask me, it's time to kick Toni out on her ass!

Originally Posted by mgtower

Cow boi?

If you ask me, it's time to kick Toni out on her ass!

What's a Toni?

How does this read?

The dragoness sat content on the cliff edge, basking in the sun and watching the world below. Taking notice of a mocking form below, a monitor lizard flecked in ticks moving towards a colony of ants. As she stared, a surprise came upon her as instead of eating the ant that was walking on towards it, the little lizard let it be. Infact the it lowered itself as if inviting the insect to climb atop, a familiar look of reptile pleasure was on it's face as the insect ascended it's scaly hide with it's body. And the dragoness watched, unblinking, as the insignificant ant started to dislodge and remove the offending parasites that dotted the monitor's body.
The dragoness pondered about this for a long moment, such a small weak food thing, being able to help it's equivalent of a dragon. She thought back on this for several minutes before coming to an understanding.

Would the term "the warm fuzzies" be more apt then? For me at least it's tingles.

Originally Posted by cowboi69

Would the term "the warm fuzzies" be more apt then? For me at least it's tingles.

Originally Posted by cowboi69

What's a Toni?

My friends think you're a Toni, and I reckon their right. But just in case anyone really wants to help, however unlikely, we won't throw you out just yet.

I'm not much at judging authors, and if you like writing, well go for it. But you probably shouldn't quit your day job.

Originally Posted by frog

My friends think you're a Toni, and I reckon their right. But just in case anyone really wants to help, however unlikely, we won't throw you out just yet.

I'm not much at judging authors, and if you like writing, well go for it. But you probably shouldn't quit your day job.

Wait you guys think I'm a gay slut who thirsts for straight dude? I'm not.

I'm not going to stop trucking. I was hoping for some ideas. I'm thinking of slowly red pilling the main character with little things at first like a friend being banished right after setting a new record for wearing a shirt that sexualizes women(even tho the friend got it from a woman), then ramp it up with a woman who accuses her baby to be from the devil and it's publicly tossed in the fire for heresy, only to find out later on from the depressed husband at the bar that she just didn't want a boy baby.

Originally Posted by cowboi69

Wait you guys think I'm a gay slut who thirsts for straight dude? I'm not.

I'm not going to stop trucking. I was hoping for some ideas. I'm thinking of slowly red pilling the main character with little things at first like a friend being banished right after setting a new record for wearing a shirt that sexualizes women(even tho the friend got it from a woman), then ramp it up with a woman who accuses her baby to be from the devil and it's publicly tossed in the fire for heresy, only to find out later on from the depressed husband at the bar that she just didn't want a boy baby.

Nobody called you gay. The trouble is you talk like a woman.

If you do pull it off, what then? Who's going to want it? The blue pill world? Get real. I don't see many incell's or MGTOW's signing up either. Who does that leave? Nobody, the last time I checked. If you did manage to write a quality book, chances are still good that no one would read it.

Plenty of second rate authors get published, it happens every day. But what good does that do when nobody buys their work?

Originally Posted by frog

Nobody called you gay. The trouble is you talk like a woman.

If you do pull it off, what then? Who's going to want it? The blue pill world? Get real. I don't see many incell's or MGTOW's signing up either. Who does that leave? Nobody, the last time I checked. If you did manage to write a quality book, chances are still good that no one would read it.

Plenty of second rate authors get published, it happens every day. But what good does that do when nobody buys their work?

Oh I see. Well I'm a dude. I have a dick that proves it.
I'm hoping lonely men would enjoy the book.

Originally Posted by cowboi69

Oh I see. Well I'm a dude. I have a dick that proves it.
I'm hoping lonely men would enjoy the book.

That's fkn simpery at its finest! What lense of MGTOW are you looking through? I haven't even read it and I'm already feeling sorry for myself and tempted to suckstart a shotgun!

It's no wonder Jag's scuttling this site lock stock and barrel!

I'm hoping Payphone's watching this shit in glee, and laughing his hard working balls off!

Originally Posted by mgtower

That's fkn simpery at its finest! What lense of MGTOW are you looking through? I haven't even read it and I'm already feeling sorry for myself and tempted to suckstart a shotgun!

It's no wonder Jag's scuttling this site lock stock and barrel!

I'm hoping Payphone's watching this shit in glee, and laughing his hard working balls off!

Simpery? How? The villain is a princess, and society.

Originally Posted by cowboi69

Simpery? How? The villain is a princess, and society.

Okay Tinkerbelle, I've had enough of your shit! Take your Disney copycat lookalike elsewhere! Princess stories from wonderland are Just Girly Things! Where the fuck are your balls?

Originally Posted by mgtower

Okay Tinkerbelle, I've had enough of your shit! Take your Disney copycat lookalike elsewhere! Princess stories from wonderland are Just Girly Things! Where the fuck are your balls?

Disney? If anything this strikes me as more of a Shrek. A property outside the norms fueled by spite.

Originally Posted by cowboi69

How does this read?

Blah Blah Blah.

It reads like you’re as grammatically challenged as you are intellectually.

Can you share whatever you’re smoking?

https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=00jbPxru1zs

Originally Posted by Jackoff

It reads like you’re as grammatically challenged as you are intellectually.

Can you share whatever you’re smoking?

Sorry. It's my first work.

Originally Posted by Chris007

https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=00jbPxru1zs

Thank you.